Technical Analysis: Style, stance, tone, and all sorts of good fodder

Stance: Different opinions of what you think about your topic.

Changing stance without changing tone or audience:
Young audience (elementary/jr. high)

1) Annie moved closer to Billy. She looked at him, and he looked back, wide-eyed. She scooted closer on the lunch bench. Her eyes were big and brown with long lashes. Billy gulped. Her hand touched his, very softly, and all of a sudden she was holding his hand. Billy smiled. He held her hand tighter, and they spent the rest of lunch sitting close together.

2) Annie moved closer to Billy. She looked at him, and he stared back, wide-eyed. She scooted cloer on the lunch bench. Her eyes were huge, with long freaky lashes. Billy gulped. Her hand touched his, just barely, and all of a sudden she had grabbed his hand. Billy grimaced. She held his hand tighter, and he spent the rest of lunch trying not to sit so close together.


Changing tone without changing stance:
Older audience (college/adult)

1) Anna sidled closer to William. She gazed through him, nearly piercing his soul, and he ogled back, one eyebrow raised. She slithered even closer on the bar stool. Her eyes were enormous, with sweeping, sultry lashes framing delicate eyelids. William choked slightly on his martini. Her hand brushed his, ever so slightly, and suddenly the warmth of her hand spread across his as she interlocked fingers. William choked harder. With one too many drinks, he could not pull himself from her spell, and he spent the rest of the night trying to dislodge her surprisingly persistant grip.

2) Anna sidled closer to William. She looked at him intensely and longingly, as if she was interested, and he stared back in shock and nervousness, one eyebrow raised. She cunningly moved closer on the bar stool. Her unblinking eyes were enormous, and she gazed flirtatiously at him with her long eyelashes. William coughed in embarrassment. She reached out and her hand brushed his to get his attention, and suddenly she had interlocked her fingers with his. William became more embarrassed and felt all the more awkward. With one too many drinks, he couldn't bring himself to tell her off, and he spent the rest of the night trying to pull his hand from her stubborn hold.